Wow Router! Congrats in finishing the first chapter! it's incredible! and really really well done! I have already played it once through and I'm going through it a second time to see the other options.

And many thanks for the dedication and mention! I'm honoured!!!

And really I'm impressed and I applaud at your having finished the first chapter, and it wasn't even too long ago that you first thought of doing this!

The only critique I have is that there are a few sentences that don't quite have proper grammar. but just one or two. I'll play again and make notes on it if you want and I can tell you.
Otherwise it is excellent! And man I love how you pulled it off with the background the leaf animation and all! and the great CG!

I can't wait to see the next episode!
(I'll be sure to spread the word)

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I used to plan it to only be a small-time production, though in seeing what I'm capable of making with this, I think it turned out very grand looking.. For an amateur production. Hmm for now the options doesn't really matter but I'm thinking of making the options you make would shape up her character later and eventually lead to how she interacts with people in the long run as well as different endings.

Well I feel the definite need, I must say that you've been the one to motivate me towards continuing Windy Capital and that motivation really goes a long way in completing this(seeing as there aren't really many other people into this or up to seeing this finished and seeing how much you want to see it done).

For a month's work, yes.. I can say I'm proud for finishing this.

Well the critique please do mention. I do expect trouble of this kind, seeing as I was the only one doing all this and all the game codes and story scripts get all mixed up it's hard to see where the mistake goes, even though I originally had typed it in MSword.. That and since I'm no native english speaker and the community here don't speak english by most there ought to be awkward things that I wrote. Well it'd help a lot to have a proofreader.. If you don't mind, please do. And maybe with that you can be counted as a part of the production team? Don't worry though, I won't be stressing on your task.. In fact, I'm more than grateful to have anyone helping. Even by bits.

Also, a minor grammar edit such as this can have it fixed right away without having as big a file involved. Seeing as only the game script file changed, which should only be around a few kbs in size.

Regarding the CG, actually of late I picked up a book at the college library, it was Heaven On Earth: Art In Islamic Lands and I saw many beautiful Frescos from the middle east in it. It inspired me to work the backgrounds this way, a simple and very badly done traditionally(trust me, you'll puke seeing the original), scanned and edited in Photoshop with filters.. It turns out similar like those frescos.
I don't know if it's bad or good, seeing people have been giving out different opinions regarding this, some says the CGs are really distracting while some thinks it's really nice and unique.
While there are people who says the background music with the vocal is distracting, when some other do not.
Some are impatient by the story flow while some say it's just alright, depend on how it turns out. From what I could make out of these comments, all that I could conclude in is that Windy Capital isn't for everyone, as with everything out there.
And maybe my seriousness of working with this have some people being hard on me?? o_0;; Well thing is I've been checking the other RenPy games and to say mine's among the better looking ones actually.. Not to brag, but I think it really seemed so. One that would be the closest in quality with this would be a team production's "Ori, Ochi, Onoe" which you can find there. Considering the overall quality in those RenPy games.. I think I didn't do as bad as some people have been saying... And if you ask me as in a player point of view, for an out-of-japan amateur visual novel it's quite revolutionary, and doesn't comply to the usual animeness and visual novelness instead just trying to tell the story in its own honest, and unique way while yet without trying too hard to be unique. Seemed that way to me, at least. Just my opinion.

Hehe do spread the word. Though the next episode may take as less time, longer or just as long to complete. Who knows.. With the finals closing in and all >_> though I think I'll spend some of my free time here.

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Definitely, if you can get to telling the whole story of Windy Capital in this format without straining then go for it! because well what counts in this case is to tell the story. And it would be great to see it all! Though lets not get too ambitious, otherwise you'll be setting impossible goals for yourself. Just try to focus on getting the story rolling Especially because this is your first. when you feel comfortable with it all then you can increase the level of difficulty and complexity.

>.< I'm surprised because well I'm really interested and the art is gorgeous and well Hertova is endearing (to the point where ~phuzzypanda drew her as a guest at ~club-d a while back Well no accounting for taste... but I'm thinking that it just needs a little more exposure.

As for proof reading I think I'll send it to you via e-mail in a word file. then I can bold the areas of change and all.

Oh dear... well at least you managed to fix the background up and now it looks good

Again people have different tastes and preferences... there is no pleasing everyone but it's good to try and compromise. to please the most people possible. And the fact that you have the comments asking for advanced critique and that you made it a big project people will pay more attention. consider their critism as way of expressing possible improvements. Though the CG is at a standstill, I think that seeing as there are people who like it (me included) I woudl stick to it. Though I will admit that songs with lyrics makes it harder to concentrate on the reading especially if english is not their first language, so maybe sticking to instrumental from here on after? then you see there is a compromise

Definitely one of the best! (I tool a look at what other things Renpy had to offer... and it wasn't nearly as nice looking or enjoyable). And definitely stick to it! It's an unfortunate fact that most people don't take to unique things as easily (notice that DA is often overrun with fanart, and unoriginal things) the stuff that is different takes time for people to like so don't get discouraged, just let time work and you'll see there will be more appreciation. Besides this is your first So you'll obviously improve as you go along

I can't wait for the next episode! I hope it'll come soon, though don't kiil yourself over it just have fun

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*blink, blink*
Do I believe my eyes?? How did you make it into a visual novel?!

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I was only aiming for a cheap shot.. But as I explored and find that I can do more than just that.. Well this is the result.
Though frankly speaking, these are just about what I can do with it for now. I wish to learn to do more.

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*gaspsssssss*

*O* MUST TRY THIS lol

I wish I could play this but I kinda need the space on my comp for college stuff TT__TT

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Well I don't know but this only spans around 50mb. Shouldn't be that much of a burden to be stored. Then again you can delete the game after playing it and all..
Though that means if the expansion comes out then you'd have to re-download this again.

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Oh I see... It try it when I have time to play XD

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Sure, whenever.

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